Aim: Now that you’ve turned in the first draft of your formal assignment to me (via email), we are going to continue practicing reading as writers, observing Turkle’s stylistic choices as we take note of her argument.
8:00-8:15: questions on paper submission, reminding of grading, attendance
8:15: Focusing in on chapter 4
What’s a thesis statement?
8:30-9: Please take about 30 minutes to do the following, which you’ll post just before the break as a comment on this post,
- Isolate a “thesis” statement for the chapter 4. Type it out, with a proper citation, noting what type of thesis statement it is (analytic, expository, argumentative, or some combination of these).
Here are the notes we took in class on developing a thesis statement:
- Write out and cite three summary sentences from anywhere in the chapter that refer back to this thesis. What is a summary sentence? The last sentence of the paragraph–imagine the story or argument is a liquid you’re pouring into a funnel to condense it to a main stream or flow of an idea; the small opening of the funnel is the summary sentence; it focuses the paragraph.
- What kind(s) of “enchantment” is Turkle describing in this chapter? Describe it in a few sentences.
- Which example in her argument in this chapter do you find most compelling? Why?
- Of which example are you most skeptical? Why?
Please post before the break.
9:15-9:25: Review the responses and “like” any you found especially clear and well thought out. LIKE 2, COMMENT on 1.
9:25-10:15: Large group discussion
What are your impressions of Turkle’s use of examples so far? Whom do you think she is trying to convince with these examples? Whom might she not convince?
For next time…
We will not meet this Wednesday (all of CUNY is closed Wed. to Fri. for the Rosh Hashanah holiday). Before we meet again on Monday 9/29, please read chapters 5 and 6 of Alone Together. In the next couple of days, you will also receive a few things from me. First, I will send you an email assigning you a peer review group and giving you directions about how to read your group members drafts before next class. I will also post those groups on the blog. Secondly, you will receive feedback from me modeling the types of comments I would like you to make on your classmates papers in anticipation of the peer review session.
*Update as of 9/23–please read!
My Reviewers is the name of the website we’ll be using this semester to conduct peer reviews of your formal writing assignments. The site will allow us to record and organize both my comments on your work and all your peers’ comments in one easy-to-access space that we’ll keep returning to all semester. To register for MyReviewers, please follow these instructions: http://myreviewers.com/help/students/register/
Register as a “new user” and use this class registration code: LEADING123
Once you have created a new account, log in to My Reviewers to upload your draft. The draft must be uploaded as a PDF. To save a Word document as a PDF in Microsoft Word, go to “save as”–under the file title, you’ll see a line for “type of file”–from the drop down menu, choose “PDF,” and save the document in a folder you can find again. If you are working in Google docs, you can go to “File” and “download as PDF.” If you’re work in pages, export the file as a PDF.
Once you are logged into MyReviewers and have a PDF ready to upload, follow these directions: http://myreviewers.com/help/students/upload-a-document/ Select “Project 1” and “early draft”
By Wednesday afternoon (9/24), you will be placed into peer review teams of four people each. Outside of class, I will review your draft and offer comments; you will also provide feedback to the members of your group. Your comments should include 1 note per page and at least 3 “community comments”: http://myreviewers.com/help/students/community-comments/. To use a “community comment,” follow these instructions: http://myreviewers.com/help/use-community-comments/
In a nutshell… here’s what you should do between now and Sunday night:
- as soon as possible, create your MyReviewers account and upload a PDF of your first draft!
- review your group members’ first drafts by logging into http://myreviewers.org and opening the papers of the people in your assigned peer review group, following the commenting instructions above.
- For Monday, September 29th, please bring in a hard copy of any comments you received on your paper so that you can discuss them in person with your group, get clarification, and work toward your revision.
- finally, for next class, please read chapters 5 and 6 in Alone Together.
I recommend that you review this sample definition essay and read the comments composed by a classmate on this draft before you begin commenting: sample draft of definition with peer comments